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chair ghurie nile tumi alada tebil....ki asadharan line avijit dasgupter....ei line ta amake kal theke kheye niechhe..khub sundar....ekta kabita jeta suru holo..ekta jekono prasthan...ekta guro guro pap...ekta mon kharap...udasinota...e parjantya bodh er modhhey thik cholchilo sabder gati...tar bodhyogommyota...e parjantya ekta kabita hote chaichhilo oi sab sabder misran... er hatat beke gelo ses line e ese...bodh chomke gelo dekhe..ja tar modhhey futchilo..sei sab sabdya hatat...ghure gechhe annya line....er ses line e ese katakuty khelchhe amar path....asamanya kabita...ekta nitol kabitar theke ekta natun kichhu bolar kabitay ei moja ta thake sabsomoi...
Sanjoy, khub bhalo lageche tomar kobita. Eta pathaker kathaa, kobitar kathaa noy kintu.'Nil' shabdota theke rong muche deya jaina, tai sobuj aranyo majhe kuyashay nil ese pore dhebre geche chobita. Abashyoi tumi rong chaoni, cheyecho gobhirataa. kintu ki jano, B for blue ar G for green..ei duto rong vibgyor screen-e pashapashi thake bolei pashapashi uchharan korte bhalo lage.eta common man-er problem. kintu for understanding of an intelligent man oi dutoi spectrum-er majhkhane bose theke madhyomedha kobider akarshon kore thake. Nil k kibhabe use koren kobira ta niye Pradip Chakraborty'r 'Chatim Harbola' boi-e likhechi.Tumi bhalo likhecho, seta niye beshi balaar cheye ei dilema niye balaai uchit mone korlam.
Animikh, khub bhalo likhechis. ete the 'last supper' represent hochhe. shunyo dashake ei bhalo laga manayna.jodi reflection hoto, e.i. situationtar immaging hoto, tahole suit korto beshi. tor composition-e ekta reverse order was wanting. unit gulo well composed.
Bhaskar,nodi,jahaj,dheu...egulo eto obvious je kobita dhorte parena ar. kobitar bakita besh bhalo observation. ami tomake ekta link dhoriye di barong. maach,makor,maloy ba mon hente geleo ki dheu othe na? tahole egulo tumi bhable na keno?
Manik,kalpo'r(kobita+galpo) abhas pachhi. prathame metaphor mone hochhilo Ishworike, kintu 7 times ref er par ta human hoye commenplace hoye gelo. Bhalo laglona.
Sonju, kobitata mushre poreche matro, nihato hoyni to. Oi 1ta shabdo-nil- je eto bhabalo .. ei bhabnagulo kobita lekhar samoy ar paraar samoy duibhabe cholte thake. Ekbar nirmaner samoy, ar ekbar binirmaner samoy. ei time gross matching ba parallel na, mutually influence karenaa. dont worry.
Debashis, wonderfull legeche kobitata. lekha ar khela'r modhye immaging ache, note korlam, rasta ar gharer modhye alo andhakarer sei rakam immaging ache. ki likhecho !
Sanghamitra, tor kobitateo MOM ! kintu kobitata apurbo. 'kingba' ei shabde je addition ba alteration ache ta kobitake weak kare. kobi soja kathaa bolbe, ekta kathaa ekbar bolbe. tor kobitay bakita dekh. ki asadharan composition hoyeche!
Somnath, my congratulations ! ki je asadharan kobita likhechis ! thik je kobita ami roj likhte chai. kobitay constructivity'r application darun hoyeche, incremental composition lay kore kore. ami janina katakhaani aware chili tui processtar byapare. pl, do it again and again.
Shouvik, tumi koyekta comments assemble korecho in orderly way as stairs which are stairing ammusedly, bolche amader kobita karo, kobita karo. eguloke undone rakhle keno?
Alamiti, Anupam. BAAK is very unusual webzin. kintu mone rakhte habe, in print etake tough competition-e porte habe. Good Luck.
eto sundar ekta path padhhati cholchhe...bandhyu ra kothay...?..nijer kabitar path i ba kamon laglo...jakhan nirman er por binirman cholchhe apnar kabitay...arthat lekhar por apni jakhan pathok nijer kabitar?..
ami khub obak holam barin ghosal er moto ekjon manush amar kobitatir eto sohoj sorol o ekti bhranto motamot dilen dekhe. eti anoo keu korle kichu blar chilo na. kintu barinda jodi emon bhabe byakkshya koren tobe bolte hoy tini khub seriously amader/amar lekha porchen na. ami shocked. bol auchit noy, kintu ishwari manabi noy. apni binoy majumdar tante paren. ami kharap hobo na. ami tar dharer kacheo jai ni. asole lekhar por dekhlam sobdo ti ar amar thaklo na. kintu baak e diye dilam. ekta halka experiment bolte paren-hoyto osofol.
ami barinda ke ar ekbar kobiatati porte onurodh korchi. seriously. ebong isshwarike, isshwari ba manabi bhebe noy, anno kichu dhore niye- jemon dhorun amader prithibi............
PROTHOMEI ABHINANDAN ANUPAMKE.BAAK ER YATRA SUVO HOK.22ND POST ER SUCHANA KABITAR NIL RANGER MODHYE KICHU SIRI THAKE ASHADHARAN.EMONKICHUR JONYOI BAR BAR BAAK E CLICK KORTE HOBE.ANIMIKH ER KABITA BHALO LAAGE AAR EI SANKHAY THE LAST SUPPER SEI BHALOKE DWIGOON KORLO.SOUVIK ER LEKHAY ADBHUT EK SAHAJ SURER REKHAPAT. TABU SETAI JANO ANEK ANEK.SAMIK ER TUPTAP ANGUL BAJCHE SONO BHALO LAAGLO AAR SANGHAMITRAR LEKHATIO BESH.
Dhonyobad barin da, aryanil da. tomar suggestion mathay rakhbo, jate pore lekhar samay kaje lagate pari... kichudin out of station chilam, tai blog e asa hoyni....
more jai more jai...sanghamitradi asamvab valo.protiti shabde sachetan kalampeshe akkhorik.e sab samvab hole mone hay natun amar natun,jodio vetore ekhono roye gache puratan premer rirangsa... Avishek ke hats off korchi na hats on na on/no off/on anon/off evabe chalun shbde mati.eke kobita bolle kobita,utsab bolle tai,asole amader janan ek traumatic pranay.
chair ghurie nile tumi alada tebil....ki asadharan line avijit dasgupter....ei line ta amake kal theke kheye niechhe..khub sundar....ekta kabita jeta suru holo..ekta jekono prasthan...ekta guro guro pap...ekta mon kharap...udasinota...e parjantya bodh er modhhey thik cholchilo sabder gati...tar bodhyogommyota...e parjantya ekta kabita hote chaichhilo oi sab sabder misran...
ReplyDeleteer hatat beke gelo ses line e ese...bodh chomke gelo dekhe..ja tar modhhey futchilo..sei sab sabdya hatat...ghure gechhe annya line....er ses line e ese katakuty khelchhe amar path....asamanya kabita...ekta nitol kabitar theke ekta natun kichhu bolar kabitay ei moja ta thake sabsomoi...
'Baak'-ke swagoto. Rangeet ar Avisek-er songey amar je alochona hoyechhilo, taa ekta shape pachhe dekhe khuby valo lagche. namkoron Anupam-er brainchild. hoyto siggiry eta ekti website hoye uthbe- ekti web-magazine, tarpor hoyto bochhorey kichhu printed issues. ekta platform toiri hotey choleche, egiye choluk 'Baak'.
ReplyDeleteBAAK asadharon.e dharaner kaaj agami din k samridha karbe....k kake niswa karbe shudhu ei mehafil jane...mugdha kare,.....bristiowala tuptap angul bajche shono..rangit,shamik.sanghamitra k bhalo laglo.BAAK chhariye paruk pardai pardai beabru haye.
ReplyDeletechabita darun setecho.............r
ReplyDelete............kabita anekgulo bes valo.......stti ebar baak nebar pala.........kabitar mara gange ektu joar asuk.
abhinandan, Anupam ebong bondhura. Baak amake abaak kore dik.jeno kaak na hoye uthi. tomra ekta archieve kore prevpost gulo tate gunje rakho. khulle kebol fresh issueta khuluk.22ta issue porpor khulle manojog hariye jachhe. E parjanto post gulor modhye 21st was best. sekhane kobita theke Jibonanando sathik bidai nichhilen.
ReplyDeleteSanjoy, khub bhalo lageche tomar kobita. Eta pathaker kathaa, kobitar kathaa noy kintu.'Nil' shabdota theke rong muche deya jaina, tai sobuj aranyo majhe kuyashay nil ese pore dhebre geche chobita. Abashyoi tumi rong chaoni, cheyecho gobhirataa. kintu ki jano, B for blue ar G for green..ei duto rong vibgyor screen-e pashapashi thake bolei pashapashi uchharan korte bhalo lage.eta common man-er problem. kintu for understanding of an intelligent man oi dutoi spectrum-er majhkhane bose theke madhyomedha kobider akarshon kore thake. Nil k kibhabe use koren kobira ta niye Pradip Chakraborty'r 'Chatim Harbola' boi-e likhechi.Tumi bhalo likhecho, seta niye beshi balaar cheye ei dilema niye balaai uchit mone korlam.
ReplyDeleteAnimikh, khub bhalo likhechis. ete the 'last supper' represent hochhe. shunyo dashake ei bhalo laga manayna.jodi reflection hoto, e.i. situationtar immaging hoto, tahole suit korto beshi. tor composition-e ekta reverse order was wanting. unit gulo well composed.
ReplyDeleteAbhijit jeno 100 bachar agekar meyeder lekha nabel porche .. pl. dont mind my comment, Abhijit. bhabo, aro bhabo.
ReplyDeleteBhaskar,nodi,jahaj,dheu...egulo eto obvious je kobita dhorte parena ar. kobitar bakita besh bhalo observation. ami tomake ekta link dhoriye di barong. maach,makor,maloy ba mon hente geleo ki dheu othe na? tahole egulo tumi bhable na keno?
ReplyDeleteTomakeo duo, Palash. shes parjanto gitobitan theke berote chaicho ei basante. hese uthche Singbhumer maath.
ReplyDeleteetobar Abhijit ! durdanto ei kobitay 'Pap' ei shabdota golmal koreche.uncalled for mone hoyeche amar. Athacha fatafati hoyeche shasta.
ReplyDeleteAbhishek,holona kobitata. Harappa theke kon bipass dhore tui ba pakhi surdung-e pouchobi sta kobiar kahini hote pare na.
ReplyDeleteManik,kalpo'r(kobita+galpo) abhas pachhi. prathame metaphor mone hochhilo Ishworike, kintu 7 times ref er par ta human hoye commenplace hoye gelo. Bhalo laglona.
ReplyDeletesudhyu ekta rang evabe ekta kabitake hatya kore ei pratham janlam..er upolobdhi o korlam...chatim horbola....kothay paoya jabe...setao boro katha na...kintu eibar rang gulo bodh hoi amar kachhe paltachhe...ba paltabe....asadharan ei utoor ba kabita vabna amar mone thakbe barinda...
ReplyDeleteSonju, kobitata mushre poreche matro, nihato hoyni to. Oi 1ta shabdo-nil- je eto bhabalo .. ei bhabnagulo kobita lekhar samoy ar paraar samoy duibhabe cholte thake. Ekbar nirmaner samoy, ar ekbar binirmaner samoy. ei time gross matching ba parallel na, mutually influence karenaa. dont worry.
ReplyDeleteHrishikes, tomake request kori, ei kobitati theke galper element gulo tule nile kemon hoy chehara ba impression, try kore dekho.
ReplyDeleteDebashis, wonderfull legeche kobitata. lekha ar khela'r modhye immaging ache, note korlam, rasta ar gharer modhye alo andhakarer sei rakam immaging ache. ki likhecho !
ReplyDeleteSanghamitra, tor kobitateo MOM ! kintu kobitata apurbo. 'kingba' ei shabde je addition ba alteration ache ta kobitake weak kare. kobi soja kathaa bolbe, ekta kathaa ekbar bolbe. tor kobitay bakita dekh. ki asadharan composition hoyeche!
ReplyDeleteShomik, 'nodi' shabdota durbal korlo kobitatake. Tabe sadyo bibahitoder janyo ei romantikota spare karaai jai, tai na Anupam?
ReplyDeleteRongeet, kobitate rationalize karaar chesta anartho toiry kare. bhulbhal punctuation diyechis keno? 'kono karon jana jay na' balaa matro kobita theke kobita biday nilo. ki hoyeche tor? ekhano guide k potaate parisni? tahole guide-er meyeke potabi kabe ?
ReplyDeleteSomnath, my congratulations ! ki je asadharan kobita likhechis ! thik je kobita ami roj likhte chai. kobitay constructivity'r application darun hoyeche, incremental composition lay kore kore. ami janina katakhaani aware chili tui processtar byapare. pl, do it again and again.
ReplyDeleteShouvik, tumi koyekta comments assemble korecho in orderly way as stairs which are stairing ammusedly, bolche amader kobita karo, kobita karo. eguloke undone rakhle keno?
ReplyDeleteAlamiti, Anupam. BAAK is very unusual webzin. kintu mone rakhte habe, in print etake tough competition-e porte habe. Good Luck.
Aro ekta kathaa. kobita prokashito hoye gele ta ar kobir thakena, hoye pare paathaker. bibhinno paathaker nana matamat hoye thake. tai kono ekjan paathaker kathaay nirutsaho hote nei. Tabe kono paath protikriyar poxe ba bipoxe kobir kichu balaa saaje naa. jodi keu mone karo justify karaa uchit, tahole mone koro sei scope na rakhlei bhalo hoto.
ReplyDeleteeto sundar ekta path padhhati cholchhe...bandhyu ra kothay...?..nijer kabitar path i ba kamon laglo...jakhan nirman er por binirman cholchhe apnar kabitay...arthat lekhar por apni jakhan pathok nijer kabitar?..
ReplyDeleteami khub obak holam barin ghosal er moto ekjon manush amar kobitatir eto sohoj sorol o ekti bhranto motamot dilen dekhe. eti anoo keu korle kichu blar chilo na. kintu barinda jodi emon bhabe byakkshya koren tobe bolte hoy tini khub seriously amader/amar lekha porchen na.
ReplyDeleteami shocked.
bol auchit noy, kintu ishwari manabi noy. apni binoy majumdar tante paren. ami kharap hobo na. ami tar dharer kacheo jai ni. asole lekhar por dekhlam sobdo ti ar amar thaklo na. kintu baak e diye dilam. ekta halka experiment bolte paren-hoyto osofol.
ami barinda ke ar ekbar kobiatati porte onurodh korchi. seriously. ebong isshwarike, isshwari ba manabi bhebe noy, anno kichu dhore niye- jemon dhorun amader prithibi............
reference debar jonno khomaprarthi.
PROTHOMEI ABHINANDAN ANUPAMKE.BAAK ER YATRA SUVO HOK.22ND POST ER SUCHANA KABITAR NIL RANGER MODHYE KICHU SIRI THAKE ASHADHARAN.EMONKICHUR JONYOI BAR BAR BAAK E CLICK KORTE HOBE.ANIMIKH ER KABITA BHALO LAAGE AAR EI SANKHAY THE LAST SUPPER SEI BHALOKE DWIGOON KORLO.SOUVIK ER LEKHAY ADBHUT EK SAHAJ SURER REKHAPAT. TABU SETAI JANO ANEK ANEK.SAMIK ER TUPTAP ANGUL BAJCHE SONO BHALO LAAGLO AAR SANGHAMITRAR LEKHATIO BESH.
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khub surelaa, nipuN, nirjan o lyrical astanirjaner kabitaa. "araNya shabder bhetar sheeter byaasaardha raye gechhe" - eman sab visceral pa`mkti. ebaar kabike anurodh karabo oi aaraNyak recipe chherhe, oi gheso gandha chherhe beriye ese anya kichhu kare dekhaate. Once again, I must restate - prakRiti baa nisarger abhyantar theke aa`nkashi mere aparUp kabitaa ber karaa nishchay art, kintu se bhaai aneker karen. nijeke aaro challenge karun. khu`njun aaro bhinnatara khani.
ReplyDeletekhub chhoTo kabitaa aamaay etai kam Taane aajakaal Je kichhu balaar mata khu`nje paai naa. aamaar mane hay khub chhoTo kabitaa, atirikta mitabhaashhaN - egulo anek taruN kabir madhye thaake. bayaser sange sange keTe Jaay. laxya karaben Swadesh Sen-er matao mitabyaayee kabio bayaser sange sange kabitaake kataTaa barha karechhen.
Manik-er kabitaay hayato rework karaar scope aachhe. "aamaar eeshbaree" shunale Binay ke mane naa haye upaay nei. kaajei oi cliche Taake badale kichhuTaa radabadal kare dekhate paaro, hayato khub natun ekaTaa raastaa khule Jaabe. baa natun ekaTaa jaanalaa. sbapnil chetanaar aastar-prastar abirata parate parate garhe oThaa o khule Jaabaar ekaTaa mejaaj aachhe, seTaake saariye tolaa Jaay. Manik tumi ki Buddhadeb Basu-r bai "droupadeer saaree" parhechho. purano kabitaa haleo parhe dekhate paaro. taar choraa mejaaj ekhaane aachhe.
abhishhek er cheshhTaa khub bhaalo laagachhe. o khub despo haye ekaTaa nijasba uchchaaraN khu`njachhe. nijer garhan khu`njachhe. apexaay roilaam.
prashnaateetabhaabe ebaarer seraa kabitaa Somnath-er. somnath daaruN lekhaa hachchhe, just daaruN. But no complacency ? Thik to?
aar ekaTaa chhoTo suggestion - oi 1,2 ityaadi sa`mkhyaa diye point naa kare anyarakam kichhu bhaabaa Jaay naa? anya kona chinha baa niden paxe bullet....
BAAK, ebhaaei daak
daakate thaak
Dhonyobad barin da, aryanil da.
ReplyDeletetomar suggestion mathay rakhbo, jate pore lekhar samay kaje lagate pari...
kichudin out of station chilam, tai blog e asa hoyni....
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ReplyDeletemore jai more jai...sanghamitradi asamvab valo.protiti shabde sachetan kalampeshe akkhorik.e sab samvab hole mone hay natun amar natun,jodio vetore ekhono roye gache puratan premer rirangsa...
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evabe chalun shbde mati.eke kobita bolle kobita,utsab bolle tai,asole amader janan ek traumatic pranay.