ei prothom ekjon kobi aamader jonne daakjog-e kobitaa paathiechhen . tini somobrata sarkar . ei sankhya-r prochhod ekechhen ROCHISNU . tnaake dhonyobaad .
aar kobitagulo thikvaabe porte hole pochhonder kobitar upor ekti left click korun . egulo jpeg chhobi hisebe rakhaa aachhe . chaaile nijer priyo lekhati nijer computer-e rekhe diteo paaren , jokhon khusi aabar porte paarben .
AAR POROBORTI SANKHYA-E KICHHU VISUAL POEM RAAKAHAR CHESTA KORBO .
ANUPAM MUKHOPADHYAY
5th post e Rawcha - r prochhod eshe khub valo holo..e vabei egiye jawa aro..:)
ReplyDeleteSomobroto-r kobita vaalo laglo.Anupam, tomar kobita kothay? agertateo ..tomar kobita dao..
বা্ংলায় মন্তব্য লেখা যাচ্ছে কি? দেখা যাক
ReplyDeleteebarer sab kata kobitai amar besh bhalo legeche --tai alada bhabe ar karu katha bolbo na sudu bolbo besh bhalo agocche blog-- aro agiye jak---
ReplyDeleteRamit..
এই তো যাচ্ছে...
ReplyDeleteঅভিষেক এমন অসাধারণ explore করে নিজেকে যে সাধারণ কথাও নতুন হয়ে ওঠে। কিন্তু এত বিশেষণ কেন? মনে হয় কেউ চুল ধরে মাথা ঢুকিয়ে দিচ্ছে জলে... যদি দম না বন্ধ হয়, তবেই দেখবো জলের অপরূপ
bhalo laglo
ReplyDeleteManik said:
ReplyDeleteAnupam protom comment ami korte parlam na!!!
prothomei dhonnobad Rochisnu ke, amader jonno ekti sundor procchod toiri korar jonno.
arko khub choto sutorang অভিনেবেশ ovinibesh sobdotite dhakka lagche...
Abhisheker kabita besh ekti palki choloner moto hmhm kore choleche. bhalo, tobe metafore vorakranto hoye gelo je.
oishik er lekha updated hoye uthte parlo na...
onek shobder byabohar bohul baybohare clishe hoye gache..jomunaboti, bhubondangar math,shonkhochil ittadi sobdogulir baybohar puronobhabe kora hoyeche.amra to onekta egiye esechi eisob shobdo theke.
bhaskarjyotir lekha sobolil, ekbare pora jay..er beshi kichu bola jay na.
Ramit er lekha asolei "sorir khullei je gota kabita".bhalo laglo.
Souvik khub sudor likheche. sobder songe kibhabe khela kora jay ta dekhte pari ei kabitay.amra ek jorney khuNje pai jar porote porote suthamo suspense.
Sombroto: ajke sokale abar RABOWr "bodrokto" lekhati porchilam. sombrotor lekha pore kobitati changa hoye galo. nijer parthibo o aparthibo porichoy mele dicche tibro oboelay -kono porda nei, kono fisfis kotha nei- sopat mukher upor ekti tibro aghat.... bhalo laglo.
Rangeet ei lekhati durdanto likheche. TRAINTOLAREN bhalo.er artho ki ebhabe kora jay: traner niche keu cole gelen orthat high court ti chapa porlo bujhi.
durdanto.
ebar apni bolun.
Anupam,
ReplyDeleteBesh bhalo lagche porte ar alochanaguloy najar dite.0-dashak-er sabai khub naturally react korche,tarko ba prashno tulche. Sekhane amar uchit habe chashma khule dhoka, beshi ggyaner maal na charaano. Aj Rongeet-ke niye boli. 'এখানের ভয় থাকে; লোভেরও ভয়' sambhabato kobitatir modhye ekmatro durbal pongkti. Bakita asadharon composition hoyeche. Trentalaarain, or, mathar chuler azan ... ei chobi tumi ankle ki kore jante chai .... jate shabdo ache, dryshyo ache, natun, puropuri anyo graher bhasa .. e tumi pele kothay, Rongeet? Pl. communicate.
bhaskarjyoti aamake chomke diechhe . jukti-k jukti-te rekhe nije jol hoe boe gechhe taar lekhaati . ekta jibondorshon sekhaane aamra kurie nite paari ... setaa kintu bhaskar offer korchhe na . aamra naa chaaite seta paai . aar pae mone hoe aare !! eto aamar katha !!! aar baaksongjomer churanto udaahoron .
ReplyDeletevolaa jaae na Arka-r lekhaati . aalor moto obhinibes ... ekhaane ekta anyomonoskotaa aachhe . seta kotota swechhapronodito jaani na . Arka khub cerebral chhele . sheerly intellectual . o ektaa kaagoj kore ASHTRAY . maatha chibie poraar moto kaagoj . kintu ei kobita-e aamar Arka-k ekjon swabhaabkobi bolte ichhe korchhe . aabar kichhuta metapysical ... aamar JOHN DONNE mone pore gechhe . upovogyo lekhaa .
ektu anyomonoskota chhnue thaake Manik-er kobita-keo . seta or durbolota noe . aasole otaai or sakti kaaron taar fol-e o nijer aagraasi paathoksotwaa-k jhere felte paare .
aar Avisek , highway likhle aabar taarpor poth laage naaki ? sei poth ki highway-r sontaan ?
aar rangeet ! hats off dear !! aamar Bhaskar Chakrabarty-r moto bolte ichhe korchhe : KOBITAR JONNE DADA RANGEET ROILO , AAMI BERIE PORLAAM . abhaabonio ek vaasa tumi fele diechho aamader computer monitor-e . cinema dekhae ... bhaaggis porer line-e thele daao ni ! ebaar vaabte hobe tomaake nie ki koraa jae . ei blog-e tumi regular . protiti post-e tomaar lekha aamar chaai .
dhanyabda,,jani na aami ki likhchiu....likhe jete chai r o ;
ReplyDeleterangeet
aama k lekhar jayega dao....plzzzzzzzzzz
bhai rangeet , kobi jaane na se kilekhe . kintu setaa jaanar jonnei onyoder songe katha bolte hoe .
ReplyDeleteaar etaa to tomaar nijer jaaega bhai ! password nebe ?
Aj Abhishek-er Krishnochura -- ebaro darun laglo kobitata. Indronilke jigges kori - tumi bisheson dekhle kothay? প্লাটফর্ম পতন করে শব্দ, অথবা, মোমবাতি কুড়োনো নদী -- এরকম শব্দচিত্র বা ধ্বনি-উত্স এবং দৃশ্য-উত্স উলটে দেবার শিল্পটি বেশ আয়ত্ব করেছো তুমি, অভিষেক। Tate samanyo kathaao asadharon hoye othe. Krishnochura avenue dekhoni Anupam, je pothe dhuklei highway'r damkaa lage? Sontan keno habe -- nissantan na hole se pothe dhoka jayna go.
ReplyDeleteAnupam,
ReplyDeletetypegulo uniform korar byabostha karo pl. Jeno sab lekha by default ekta type form-e convert hoye jabe.
baastobik barinda , ebaarer post-e loraai hoechhe rangeet ebong avisek-er moddhe . kaar kobita kaake chhaapie uthechhe bolaa muskil . rangeet-er moddhe ektu automatic writing aachhe emon obhijog keu tultei paare . torko koraa jete paare setaa nie . keu surreal bolteo paare . setaa nieo torko koraa jete paare .
ReplyDeleteavisek-k nirmaner bypaare Rangeeter chaaite socheton mone hoechhe . highway-r sontaan kathata moja kore bolechhilam . TUSKIR DUKKHO mone nei aapnar ? nijer sapekkhe bolechhilaam .
hoeto sub-conscious-e aapni chhilen .
avisek-er kobitae bisesoner byabohaar to aachhei .BEHAAYA PAAOLK , KHOLAA COLONY , FUTFUTE DERAAJ , PORJOTOK BOOTH ... kintu kothaao cliche nei , anusoron nei . ebong dhwoni-r dike jaaoar sotosfurto ekta probonotaa achhe . taatwikvaabe aviseker kobita ektaa sokto viter upor dnaarie aachhe ... jodio totter dhaar naa dharleo kobir chole . na dhaarai vaalo .
avisek-er lekhaar songe to some extent ... aamar Dhiman Chakrabarty-k mone porerchhe . maane koyek bochhor aager Dhiman . kintu kobitar mejaaj onek aalada . diction kichhuta mele .
Anupam, Indronil-o hoyto tai mone kare. Noun-er age adverb bosiye dile seta adjective hoye jayna. Bisheson hoy bostu'r age bostugun basaale. tai amar mone hoy oi shabdogulo samprosarito bostuchetona, kono bisheson noy. oi additional wordgulo bostuke qualify korchena. Tai Abhishek-ke ami encourage korbo. Ar, Dhimaner diction .... seta ami thik bolte parbona ei muhurte, ager kobitay ei chihnno dekha jayni, se Dhimaner probhabe likhche kina. Jakhan ekjan kobi hothat ekta kobitay karo diction-er kache geche, unless he is continually following it eta bola jabena se probhabito. Eta auto-impression hote pare. Ei muhurte Abhishek-ke warn korar prayojan bodh korchina ami. Abhishek, pl carry on. You are doing fine.
ReplyDeletetaahole Barinda , ebaar ekhaane bolun bostuchetona chhaara ekjon bstugun-e kivaabe pouchhobe ? sei chetonaa jodi somprosaarito hoe ... sei somprosaaron ki byaktiniropekkho ?noyoner saamne naa theke se ki noyone noyone thaakte paare ?
ReplyDeletedhorun je DERAAJ avisek-er somprosarito chetoa-e FUTFUTE hole , taar onyer kaachhe PROSFUTITO DERAAJ hote somosya kothae ? DERAAJ thaaklo ... seta avisek jevaabe dekhlo Indronil sevaabe dekhbe na . dekhata sombhob noe .
bostuchetona ... taa se ekjoner jotoi somprosaarito hok ... byaktiniropekkho hote paare ki ? taahole biseson vaabte somosya kothaae ?
tobe etaate aami ekmot : oi sobdogulo bostuke qualify korchhe na . aaamar mone hoe ogulo Avisek-k qualify korchhe . Avisek-k somprosaarito korchhe aamader saamne .
aar aamar mone hoe na Avisek Dhiman Chakrabarty-k porechhe seivaabe . hoeto ekta kobita-o poreni . aar setaai interesting laagchhe . o ei byapaare kichhu bolle vaalo hoto .
Barinda,Anupamda,Manikda,Indranilda ke osonkhyo dhonyobad lekha pore motamot debar jonyo....apnader ei motamotguloi lekhar byapare utsaho dae...ichhe kore aaro likhte...Dhiman Chakrabarty-er lekha prosonge boli,onar lekha porechhi kintu khub kom....matro 3te...eibaar-er ekhon potrikae aar kobisommelon-er pujosonkhyae,onar lekha boi o pachhina kothao...somosya hochhe je ami bujhtei parchhina kobitatar kon jaegae Dhiman Chakrabaty-er chhap chole aschhe...Dhiman Chakrabaty-er lekha pora ei karon-e khub proyojoniyo amar...onar boi kothay pabo keu jodi janan khub bhalo hoy...
ReplyDeleteAnupam, darshonik dristi diye bostuke dekhle ta byaktinirapekkho hote parbena,kintu boigganik dristi diye dekhle byaktinirapekkho habe.O dashaler kobira sebhabei dekhbe ei postmodern juger periye ese, eta asha karaa jay. Futfute hoke ba fatafati, seta jatakkhan deraj,ebong ta rupak noy,protik noy, kenona ei samaye ta expected na, jehetu bostur bisheson na, tai tomar comment kata gelo.
ReplyDeleteAbhisek, ami auto-textuality ba inter-textuality bolini. Auto-inter-textuality bolechi. Mane holo Dhimaner diction ba technique ekmatro probhabito hoyei keu likhte pare seta 100% correct noy. Automaticaly ta aste pare, ebong amar dharone tumi tai korecho. Tumi ek kaj karo. 2008-e Kaurab Dhiman samagro bar korechilo. Nam Dhimaner Charachar. Paowa jabe amader store e Sudeshnar kache. Oke 9830188068 no. e contact koro. Tanmoy Roy jaygata chene. Boita kine niyo. khub bhabo lagbe.
Ebar Anupam dekhiye debe kothay Dhimaner songe texture-e mile jachhe tomar lekha. Tumi jene nao, kintu haal cherona. Asambhab bhalo likhcho tumi.
Ar, Rongeet kothay gele? Respond karo. Naki pachando hochhena amar interfarence?
Avisek
ReplyDeleteonaar number 9433239919 . khub vaalomaanus . tumi phone korle khub khusi hoben . onnar boier khobor uni sobchaaite vaalo dite paarben .
aare barinda , aamra praae eki somoy comment korlaam .
ReplyDeleteebaar aamar proshno : ekjon daarshonik , ekjon biggani ebong ekjon kobi ... kothaae 3jon aalada hoben ? kobir boigganik drishti ki kaamyo ?
aami kintu mone kori je kono mohot boigganik ekjon kobi . kintu vice versa bolte ichhe kore na .
ReplyDeleteishwor-k kobi bolte ichhe kore , kaaron tini maya-e probesh korechen . kintu tnaake biggani vaabte praan chaae na .
Oishik k niye kichu boli. Toruntir mon khub-i ashanto. Se Fasaler Kkhet,Morubhumi,Jatiyo Sadak,Jomunaboti,Bhubandanga,Sagor,Shankhochil, Barud, Nouka,Rakto... ei noungulo use kore mismatch koreche, Geopoetics manena dekhchi. Ek desh ek samoyer kobita likhi amra choto kore kintu tate anek space dhukiye diye thaki. Tumi to 11-lines er modhye duniya dhokate chaicho, kono space thaklona to. Manik, ami shobder prachinota niye kichu bollamna.
ReplyDeleteBhaskarer (1) kobitati darshonik ebong jeno comentary. Kono new observation nei tai abohomaner, 100 bachorer purono idea. Anupam, ei je jawl haowa tomake jara chunye jay tarao to chirokaler, tai na?
ReplyDeleteArko'r Ashtray asadharon kagoj. Ei to sedin release holo new issue. Arko janalo kagoj niye Jamshedpure amar barite chole asbe.Kabe,Arko?
Tabe tomar ei kobitatay 'abhinibesh' shabdota manachhena,Manik thik boleche.Etake'sanhoto kobita' bolbo ami.Ki Manik, thik bolechi?
KOKHHOPOTH - ARKO -BHALO LAGLO...EKTUKRO DORSON
ReplyDeleteCHOKHE MEGH BHANGE - OISIKI - MOTAMUTI LAGLO...KI JANI, SESE SIDDHANTO DEOTA BODHOY POCHONDO HOLONA..
KRISHNOCHURA -AVISEK - BHALO LAGLO,...SOBDER SUNDOR BYBOHAR....ETA "PURONO" NA"NOTUN" DHORONER LEKHA ETA AMI BOLTE PARBO NA..AMI KOBITA-SOMALOCHOK NOI....
BHASKOR JYOTI-ER LEKHA BES BHALO LAGLO
AAMI AAMR KOBITA NIYE BHACHI;
ReplyDeleteAAMR COMPUTR KHARAP..AAMI AAMR AAMR BONDHUR PC THEKE LIKHCHI...AMI AKTU BHABCHI...AKTU BHABAR SOMOY GUNCHI ;
TACHARA AAMR PARIBARIK JHAMELA,PORASHUNO ASOBER KARONE GHNETE AACHII.....AKHN R O NIRJON HOYE THAKBO KICHU DIN..DEKHI JODI KICHU LIKHTE PARI..
Barinda,Anupamda,Manikda,Indranilda ke osonkhyo dhonyobad lekha pore motamot debar jony...
AAMI AK OSUKH A AACHII
AAMA K BOJHE NA K U
AAMI TOMA K DKHE SOHOR HOYE JAYE
JONTRORA SHIKHE JABE MANUSHER BHASA...
RANGEET......................
jontrona-k besi prosroy dio na Rangeet . taahole aamara hoeto aarekjon Rimbbaud pae jaabo , kintu ekjon Rangeet ... seki ...
ReplyDeletethis is 21st man ! nijer medicine store nijekei baanao ... nijer Iodex ...
Iodex-er sisi-r songe aari koro na bhai ...
aamara sobaai tomaake bujhte chaai ... tobe kobi-k besi bujhle aabar pornography suru hoe jaae .
oboshyo pornography aamader jibon dorshon hoe uthtei paare .
tobe ... keu tomake bojhe na bolei to kobita likhchho tumi , taai na ?
Anupam, duniyadari-ta chine nebar darshon, ar bostujagat niye common understanding-e jaowata biggan. Dutoi jorury sabar survival-er janyo. Kobir kono char nei. Tai bole kobike darshonik ba boigganik hote habena.Ta niye abeger bhason dite chay swobhab kobira ba akobira. 0-dashoke
ReplyDeleteexpected noy. Ishwar-er kathaa baad dao karon ota ekta unreal concept.Kobider special species
bhabar barabarir ki darkar ache? Se manus, manuser mato manuser janyo nijer kathaa likhbe. Taholei to holo. kobir boigganik dristi abashyo kamyo, na hole leje-gobore ki bhabe makhamakhi hoy se konodin janbena ebong gomoy o gumutroke pobitro ggan korbe.
Romit-er kobitata theke 'ami'-ke bar kore dile ar songlap-nirdesh muche dile sundar speedy hoye uthte pare. Amar aro bhalo lagto.
ReplyDelete'Grahan' kobitay Shoubhik khub definitely kathaa bolche,jekhane mohini adal nei,bishmoy nei, pathoker nijaswo kobita pabar sanbhabona rakheni se. 'Balarka' shabdota chalena.
Manik kobitatay opening 3 lines-e plain talk diyeche. Erakam 'installation' text beginer hote parena, Manik, majhkhane set kara jay, bhalo lage kobitar aebger jadota theke chuti pete. 'Horin chutche'...theke kobita hoye utheche khub sundar. Shese 'goponiyo' shabdota kharap laglo. Tmi-i na perfection-er kathaa tulechile !
ReplyDeleteAnupam,
ReplyDeleteEta abhyas hoye jachhe amar ei post-e dhuke ekla boke jabar. Ei kander ekhanei THE END. Bhalo laglo and I felt honored to have tolareted so far. Thank you all young new-century poets.
du akdin bade alam- aktu somay pacchilam na bole--
ReplyDeleteprothomei anupam ke bolbo- durdanto--
"keu tomake bojhe na bolei to kobita likhchho tumi , taai na ?"--- ai linetai bodhhay o dashoker kobir identification haoa uchit--- ar nijer medicine store nijeke bananor moddhei bodhhay kobisatta tar akhankito uraner pathe agiye jete pare--
sei je ghum bhenge geche- ar ghum bhengei dekhi amar hajar bachorer ghum amari samne dariye-- se sab upolobdhi korte gele sotty to nijer osudh nijekei batlate hobe --
r barin da ke boli-- akdom jaben na barin da-- ata amar akanto anurodh-- amra sabai akbar kore asi ai blog e sudu dekhte apnader mato amader jara senior tader kichu sabdo sonar jonno--- ai tuku apni na korle akhane amar mato anek swpno dekhar manush nijeke je chinte parbe na---
ami chai ai blog e barin dar mato manush roj asuk-- amar mone hay sabai chay tai--