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  1. Indranil Ghosh-er Kobita bhalo laglo . Abhisek-er painting ....

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  2. Indranilda amar sobcheye priyo kobider modhye ekjon,or lekha amar sobsomoyii bhalo lage,etao laglo,bhishon bhalo,baak er sob pathokera ki julywala porechhen?,parle taratari pore felun,kobitay kichhu notun rong khuNje paben...Anupamdao ekjon priyotomo kobi amar,ei lekhatao khub bhalo laglo amar,swabhabikbhabei...Tapan Das er lekha borabor er motoi sabolil ebong notun..Ramitdar ei lekhata bhalo laglo besh..aar Jayashiladi mugdho kore tullo...kichhu onobodyo kobita pelam ebar er post e

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  3. priyankar kobita kintu amar onobodyo legechhe,khub sohoj bhashay ek ononyo chhobi,monkemonkora...

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  4. Faysal Abhir kobitay amar kichhu somosya hochhe borong,ekdik theke kobitata sundor kintu ekhaneo proshno sei nijoswota niye,tachhara shobdochoyon ki ektu beshii gurugombhir noy...ektu bhebe dekhben...

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  6. Sauranshudar lekhay aftabi shobdotar byabohar mugdho korlo...kobitatay lyrical chhoNya thakay sabolilbhabei porlam,kintu mon ke chhuNlo na je...khub durer kobita bole mone hochhe,amar kobita to holona,tomar hoyei roye gelo...kobitay to kobi na thakai banchhoniyo noy ki?

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  7. tomar chhobita kintu bhabachhe Anupamda,bhishonbhabei bhabachhe...

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  8. Indrani,ei kobitatay besh kichhuta durbolota achhe bole mone holo re,hoyto eta ekta nitol kobita,kintu sob kotha eto sorasori kyano?kobitata pore bhalo bolte ichhe korchhe kintu mon kyamon korchhena,durer kobita hoyei roye gelo eta,ontoto amar kachhe...poRte thak,lekha bodlabei...lekha bodlate badhyo..prothom prothom likhchhis,sei hisebe lekhata khuub bhalo..

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  9. Anupamda,tomar lekhar ei positive negative contrast er khelata darun laage amar...notun fol/pocha ful...darun

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  10. tomar chhobigulo o amar kachhe ekta positive negative contrast er khela sobsomoy..

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  11. thik-e bolechho Avisek . tobe aami chesta kori contrast pesh naa kore taader moddhe overlapping ghawtaate . sorboda j sochetonvaabe kori taa noe . aasole oi khelaata aamar choritre aachhe . ei dhoroner choritro-k choritrohinotaa-o bolen kichhu lok .

    jemon dhoro bhaabsonghotir awbhaab thekeo ektaa bhaab berie aase . aalo keno ektaai rong hobe ! ekrongaa aalo bises bises kaacher songe aatmiota raakhe . sob kaach taar priyo hoe naa .

    tomaar chhobita ... ahaa ... etaa kintu aamar khub priyo hoe thaaklo . bolte paari naa ,''aaha ! ki dekhilaam ! jonmo jonmaantopreo vulibo naa .'' erokom chhobi aami aageo dekhechhi . Europe-e esob kaaj 5-6 doshok aagei hoe gechhe . dhoro PAUL KLEE ... tini jaanten sobkichhur mul holo rong ... '' sob kichhu-k nije theke baaRte dite hobe '' ... tnaar montro . baa PIET MONDRIAN ... prokritir baaire dnaarie praakrito jogoter harmony tini dhorechhilen ... songi chhilo rong .

    r tumi ... tomaar chhobi kintu tomaar kobitaar cheye kom mulyobaan noe Avisek .

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  12. Ebar o pratyashamatoi kichhu bhalo kabita porar sujog kore dilo Baak
    Biseshkore jader kotha bolte hoy.. Jayashila guha Bagchi,indranil Ghosh,
    Sourangshu, Priyanka Mukhopadhyay.

    Ramit da aar Anupam Da'r katha nahoy nai bollam..

    Faisal Abhi aar Tapon Dash er lekhay kichhu Kabita muhurter sristi
    holo sudhu..

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  13. bhalo laglo, bhison INDRANIL GHOSH , PRIYANKA ebong RAMIT DEY -er lekha...

    BAAK borabori notun kichu die thake....

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  14. PAR PAR KAYEKTA POST DEKHLAM...LAYOUT DARUN HAYECHE...AKDAM PC TE JANO AKTA PATRIKAR PATA...ER JANNO TOMADER SAKAL KE AMAR ANEK ANEK BHALOBASA.JE TIBROTAY KABITA GAICHE TATE ANEK ASA ANEK SAPNO...KABITAR KATO BANDHU...KATO ATTOJAN...BHABLE ATO ANANDO HAY...SAKALER MILITO SABDE ADORE EI PATA TUKU BHARE THAKUK USNOTAY...GARANO SISIRE

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  15. anupam MukhopadhyaySaturday, September 25, 2010

    thanks atanuda . ei vaabei paashe theko .

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  16. KI ODBHUTBHABE DUJON KOBIR KOBITAY EKSATHE BISCUIT ESE GALO. KE BESHI EGOLO: SOROTER DIKE BISCUIT -NA CHAer DIKE BISCUIT.

    INDRAr SOBDER SATHE INTERRELATION KHUB BHALO LAGLO. EI STYLE TA O DHIRE DHIRE NIJER BANIYE NICCHE.( KOBITAY 'BONGIO' SOBDOTAR CHEHARA COKHKE PIRA DEY, MANE KHOCHKHOCH KORE).

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  17. FAYSAL AHI
    BHALO. DORSHON PORE AMI EKTU KEMON BEKUB HOYE JAI.

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  18. RAMIT DEY

    EKTI LYRIC DHORMI KOBITA BOLLE BHUL BOLA HOBE NA. BHALO LAGLO.

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  19. JOYSILA GUHA BAGCI

    SOBDER UPOR KIBHABE NIYONTRON KORTE HOY EI LEKHAGULI TAR UDAHORON HOTE PARE. KICCHU BOLAR NEI. DURDANTO LEKHA HOYECHE. ARO HOK.
    DHONNOBAD JAYSHILA(DI/DEBI).

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  20. ANUPAM MUKHOPADHAYA

    BHALO LAGLO KABITA DUTO.

    AMAKE R 1TI LEKHAr DIKE TENE NILO:

    VOR

    SOBKICHU SORE GACHE
    KAL RATE JE PASHE SHUYE CHILO
    SE DOURE NEME GACHE

    DHIRE DHIRE KHOY HOTE THAKA
    SURJER KONA DHORE

    EITO TRAK JAPALO
    DHULO URCHE CHAYER CUPe
    MOBILER DAG KATA VOR

    SORE JAY

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  21. Priyanka,

    bhalo legeche. marvelous in reality ...

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  22. Tapon Das
    ni:sondehe bhalo.

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  23. RAMIT DEY,PRIYANKA MUKHOPADHYAY,AR ANUPAM MUKHOPADHYAY R DWITIOTO KHUB VALO LAGLO,,DHORTE PARLAM PRAN DIYE.

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  24. JOYSILA GUHABAGCHI,AR SAURANSHU MOTAMUTI LAGLO.KOTHAO EKTA ATRIPRI...

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  25. INDRANIR EI KOBITATI TEMONVABE CHNULO NA..
    TAPAN DAS R KOBITATIO VALO LAGLO NA..SORRY.

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  26. INDRANILGHOSH AR AMUPAMMUKHPADHYYAY R PROTHOM KOBITATI ADHORA ROYE GELO..AMAR I AKSHOMOTA..SORRY..

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  27. anupam MukhopadhyaySunday, September 26, 2010

    Sikta , eso ektu katha boli . nijer lekhaata niei boli .

    ekta bhor jokhon aase , prithibi ki aager raat theke obosthaan bodol kore ? amar mone hoe kore naa . kore naa kaaron aasole poriborton bole kichhu nei prithibir . jetuku bodol aamaara dekhi , sei dekhaa aamader ohong theke mukto noe . aaj ... aagaamikaal ... gotokaal ... ei sob dhaarone aasole byaktigoto somoyer songe aamader ekta somjhota aabar ektaa juddho .

    somoy ... dhoro 2000000 BC ... aabar dhoro dwitio j sankhya proyog korlaam taar ses ongshe aamar jonmodin lukono aachhe ... 17.02.1979 ... aami ki nischit jaani aami ko0n taarikhe jonmechhilaam ?!

    sudhu bneche thaaka ... maanuser songe ... maanuser indhon dhaar nie nie . ei aamar buker sorboswo . etukui chhorie raakhte chaai .

    kobitar kono maane hoe naa . kintu kobitaar bornobyabochhed koraa jaae . taar upaadangulor rawsaayon chekhe dekhaa jae .

    ei aamar nijer kobitapaath . eta aamar byakhya . onyo kaaro kaachhe onyo kichhu hotei paare . jemon manik saha nijer ekta kobitae pouchhe gechhe ekhaan theke .

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  28. kobitar alochona to anekei koreche- khub bhalo kichu lekha khub bhalo kichu alochona-- pray protidin i natun kore kichu samriddhotota kichu anibarjo onubhutir chayan.......... hayto e jonnoi bakk e bar bar phire asa

    tabe a saber baireo ai muhurte post ta korlam sudhu ai tuku bolar jonno

    " maanuser songe ... maanuser indhon dhaar nie nie . ei aamar buker sorboswo [ anupam]-- " AKMOT............. BHISON BHABE SAHOMOT POSHON KORE GELAM ANUPAM ER EI KATHATAR SATHE..

    BAAK AGIYE CHOLUK..//..........

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  29. Manik ekta daarun aabiskaar korechhe . aami ebong Indra 2 jonei 'biscuit ' shobdo byabohaar korechhi . Indra-r biscuit dhwoniprodhaan , aamar vaabprodhaan .

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  30. thanks Ramit . tor lekha pae gechhi . 45th post-e jachhe . comment koraa ektu komie diechhis . otaa baara .

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  31. Stat-e dekhlaam aaj ekhon obodhi 137 jon ei post dekhechhen . sei tulonae comments aaseni . eta unfortunate .

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  32. Ota dekhechi.....tor ta diabetic biscuit
    ar indra r ta muchmuche..

    tabe sathe cha ta diye bikeler ghum guchiyechis bole indra er sathe amrao tor bagane ghoraghuri korchi....[:)]

    r comment komai ni re.... asole ato bhalobhalo lekha agulo te comment korte giye kichu shike phire asi bar bar..... tai protita kobitar kach thekei roj i kichu shekar chesta kori -- atai antororer comment... antorik bhabe

    r ami sabsomay achi-- sabai sob somay ache baak er pechone...........

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  33. Foesol Avi -r lekhaati aagrohoddipok . shobdobohul . kintu aantorik . ei aantorik mononshilotaa bangladesh-er kobira bujhi sohojaatovaabei paaren . shobder byabohaar aaro somosaamoyik hole kobitatir chehaara ki hoto ... seta oboshyoi koutuholsaapekkho .

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  34. SOUVIK BANDYOPADHYAYMonday, September 27, 2010

    Ebarer post-e chhobi ar kobita bhalo laglo. Bhalo laglo Anupam-er 'Bhor' - somoyheenotay veshey thaka amader..ether..ether..

    Majhkhane Baak-e alochona ektu komey gechhilo, abar ekhon hochhey dekhe bhalo lagchhey..

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  35. Avisek, Anupam, Manik,
    Indronil-er kobitata niye du charte kathaa boli, thik ache? Biscut ar baundulepona ei shabdo dutoke interposition kore dao, ar dekho, senseta same theke jachhe. Tahole khelachhole shabdora lukochuri korte pare without contributing in the poem build-up! Ar, meghtake biscut bola hochhe na to, ja theke gunro gunro jhorche sharater age? Tahole biscut ekta metaphor. Tai na ki?
    Tahole 'bhishon misti' bisheshonta sei ilshegunrir janyo, tai na ki? Se to ar physicaly misti na,kono swad niye ase na. Tai na? Ebar balo, sojasuji 'Megh'bolle ki kobitata majaa harato? Tomader kar kar prak sharater akasher dike cheye megh ke biscut mone hoyechilo? Dekhcho to? Anupamer biscut chayer age practical ar Indroniler biscut chokher janyo kalponik. Eta drishyo noy, ekta kalpochitro,eta chitrokalpo-o noy. Ekta romantic kobita. 'to', 'o', esab add kore kobitatake durbol netano karaa hoyeche. Biscut ar Alibaba nonreferential entity ajker kobtay gao hoye ache. Ki, Avisek, Manik, dekhte pachho amar chokh diye? Anupam, tomar kobitar self defense-e byakhya ki kore dite parle? Ami abak hoyechi. Indronil 'bongiyo' shabdotake ar ektu bhebe chinte place korle bhalo lagto. Erakam ekta durbal kobitake sobai mile ki bhalo ki bhalo je bolte shuru korle ta 'Kobita Mancho' k lojja debe. Gustaki maap ho.

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  36. Anupam,
    Jodi self defence e neme na paro to ekta kathaa boli.'Bhor' kobiatay 1st part amar bhalo lageni.
    Etar pratham lineta ekta statement, jeta falls, karon prithibi kono muhurtei ek jaygay dariye thakena.Ghumonto manuser sense jakhan bethik, takhan erakam mone hote pare, kintu kobitay sei situation na ene 2nd ar 3rd line-e stunt deya holo. Ei ki chokh khule bhor dekhar namuna! Athacho 2nd part-ta asadharon hoyeche. Shesh lineta to apurbo, pakka kobita.

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  37. Tapan,
    Natun Kobita no.ti Shabde sokriyo noy, tai rosayaner scope payni. Drishyo compose karaa hoyeche without relation ja establishe karaa sambhab chilo relation dile. Ekta bhalo kobita shukno theke geche. Pl. edike najar dis.

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  38. anupam MukhopadhyayMonday, September 27, 2010

    wonderful aalochonaa Barinda . ei jonnei aapnake baarbaar daaki . etaa r k korte parto bolun ... u r the only Hercules ... etaa maantei hobe .

    aami self defence korini ... ha ha ha ... ami nijei nijer kobitata porte chaechhilaam . thik byakhyaao noe .

    apni aamar cheyeo vaalo porechhen . tobe ... ki korbo bolun ... amar swakale uthe sei sawkaaltaake aager diner continuatin vaabte vaalo laage . jemon vaalo laage nijeke aapnaader ... ogrojoder ... aabohomaanotae dekhte .

    ekta notun sawkaal ... amar ekta sompurno aalada sawkal vaabte vaalo laage naa . hethaa hote jaao puraaton ... aamar niti nohe ...

    tobe statement oboshyoi chhilo . aapnar chokhe nijer kobita poraar mawjaa ... se to r aapni ter pelen naa dada ...

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  39. anupam MukhopadhyayMonday, September 27, 2010

    Indra-r lekhaa aamar vaalo laage . shunyo doshoker koyekti naamer o ekjon .

    or lekhaar aasol byapaar aamar mone hoe ... nispaapota . ekta aschoryo vaasa o nijer kore niechhe . sekhaane kichhu din aage obodhi Swapan Roy-er ekta haalka rekhaapaat chhilo . ekhon setaao nei .

    or lekhaa analysis korte gele ... well Barinda ... aamar seta korte kokhono ichhe kore naa . just ichhe kore naa .

    Sharatkumar Mukhopadhyay ekbaar montobyo korechhilen , Shaarodio Kabisammelan-er paatae ,'' Rabindranath-er ulto kore katha bolaar baatik chhilo . jemon noyono tomaarte paae naa dekhite royechho noyone noyone ... '' Sharatkumar vul bolenni . setaa Rabindranath-er chhilo . hoeto setaa aamra chaaile dekhte paai . kintu taate Rabindranath-er kichhu jaae aase naa .

    biscuit j megh-er metaphor... aadou practical noe , scientific noe , romantic , durbol jaaega bes roechhe , Alibaba-k refer koraa jachhe naa ... kintu aschoryovaabe Indra-r ei lekhaata aamake childhood firie dilo . aamar taai vaalo lege gelo .

    tobe aabaro ... Indra-r kobitatar dike aapni aamader natun chokhe taakate baaddhyo korlen .

    hats off barinda !!! wonderful reading .

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  40. sudhu biscuit noe ... Indra r Anupam-er kobita-e aarektaa similar character aachhe : GNUrO ...

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  41. protyekta kobita osadharon. protyektai.

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  42. ramit day er lekha besh bhalo laglo.....echara indrani mukhopadyay er lekhao.

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  43. Avisek ar Manik ekhano absent. Thik ache, Anupam, tomakei boli -- Indro'r biscut-er gunro holo 'ilsheguri bristi', ar tomar kobitay gaan-er gunro holo 'alo'r konikara'. Duto alada legeche amar kache. Tumi 2nd time mention korle bole mone hochhe, tumi just casualy shabdotake bosiye ekhan justify korte chaicho. Behind your mind je sense-e shabdota gore uthechilo, setake ar ter pachhona. Ekjan pathoker advantage-ta bojho ebar. Tai to boli, pathoker songe kono tarko noy. Ei post-e jara khub bhalo boleche sab kobitake tader bhalo lagake ami respect kori. Amar deconstructionke tumi respect korbe etai chai. Indro bhagyis distance thekei haasche.

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  44. INDRAr KABITAY ALIBABAke AMRA DHORTE PACCHI NA BOLE ONEKER SOMOSSYA HOTE PARE. AMI KINTU OBHABE DEKHCHI NA. INDRA SOROT SOBDER POR EKTA WORD RHYTM E CHOLE ESECHE. TAI PROTTEK SHOBDER LEJUR DHORE CHOLE ESECHE R EKTI SOBDO. TAI, NODIMATTRIK-MA-JIV-ALIBABA(BABA)-CHELE-HASI.

    EKHANE ONNOKONO KICHU BAnDHA HOYE ASTE PARE NI. SABOLIL GOTITE EGIYE GECHE EBONG (ODBHUTBHABE SESH HOYE GACHE),JA "JULYOYALA"r KACHE PAONA CHILO NA. BUSCUIT EKDIKE JODI ILSEGURIr SENSE TOIRI KOTE PATHOKER MONE TO ONNODIKE KOBITAR BANGALIYANA KEO KINTU RELATE KORCHE. DEKHTE PACCHEN NISCHOI. BANGLA KOBITA PORAR POR JE RESH TA SARADIN DHORE CHOLCHE. KINBA DHORUN INDRA ARO EKTU ASHABADI. TAHOLE SOMOGRO BISWA-KABITAR PORIPREKKSHITE BANGLA EKHONO MISTI KINTU SOROT ASE NI. ASBO ASBO KORCHE. CHOLE ELEI TUMUL UTSOB.

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  45. Avishek, AnupamR kobitar ekta sundor contrast dekheche-amrao dekhechi= notun f(o)l o poNcha ful.

    ar ektu bhalo kore boiporitter kotha bolte gele bolte hoy AnupamR 1m o 2y kobita eke onner biporit kobita. eta bholo no:sondehe. 1m kabitay sobkichu 'ja jemon chilo thik temon' without any change. 2y kabitay dekha gelo 'notun fol -pocha ful'. sutorang kal ja chilo aj ta nei tar jaygay notun (kichu) eseche.

    ei boiporitto kobi hoyto ojante srristi korechen ar pathok ke diye chen birat space, ja theke hajaro kobita uthe asche. . . .

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  46. ma r songe jiver relation kibhabe hoy? mone hocche Indra MAA KALIr kotha bhebeche.

    (ami ar kobitagulir postmortem korte chai na, apnar korle korun, ami dekhchi.)

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  47. Manik,
    Eta darun diyecho bhai ! Ma-Kali ar Ali-Baba ! Ma-o achen Baba-o achen, atoyeb cheleo sure ache, je hasche ! Great!
    Bhai ami to deconstruct karaar chesta korechi. Postmortem noy. Eta to jibonto kobita, postmortem hobe keno? Asole kobir constructivity ar amar deconstructivity ek pothe jabena to!
    Ebar abar Indro k dhori.
    Kobiata bonya'r. after rains sharot dukche, Nodimatrik bangladeshe bonyar mukhe ilsheguri bristi, bhetor theke bhalo lage, baire gele bonyar rup dekhe jibhe kamor pore. Nodimatrik uccharan karo, Manik, jibh "ma" shabde thamao. Jibh kothay? kamor pore ki? Pore na. Ota articulate karaa hoyeche, myth theke Alibaba asche je chalis chorke niye jangale pipasarto ghure berachhilo kath kat-te kat-te, tar jibh, chele, hasi, bonya dekhte dekhte .. etai ei kobitar 'bongiyo', 'nodimatrikpona'... ei chitroke bichitro kore Indro ekta asamanyo kobita likheche, jekhane shese abar megher daak shona jachhe.
    Jak, ebar ei ekta kobita niye anek kathaa balaa hoye gelo. Khub bhalo lagche. Ki Manik -- Ma-Kali ar Baba-Ali theke jabe to?

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  48. sobar kobitai valo laglo besh tobe ajj ami kobitar commenst korte asi ni esechhi amar ekta onichhakrito bhuler jonno khoma chaite


    Barin da besh kichhu din dhore tomake ph korte chaichhi but ph koreo pachhi na ekta khoma chaibar achhe ami bak er dekhlam ekjaygay tomake are barin bolechhi ota mar ichhekrito noi asole ami sedin tarahuro kore post korte giye oi bipotti ta kore felechhi tumi nijeo jano tomake kotokhani ami somman kori sedin er post er por ami baaak ar dekhi ni fole nojor eriye gechhilo tarpor er comments gulo o ami dekhi ni ajj dekhe ami nijei hotobak ar stobdho hoye gechhi ar vishon lojjito o tobe eta amar onichhakrito bhul asha kori khoma korbe. tumi amake valo korei cheno tai bodh hoi jano je ami tomake oi vabe naam dhore daki ni kono din khoma koro

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  49. Suvendu,
    Ami beshi kichu mone korini. Bhebechilam maal faal kheye ultopalta hoye geche, ghor kete gele neme asbe matite abar. Bhule jao.
    Kintu, Anupam, amar to dhando katche na. Oi je manik dhoriye dilo "Ma-Kali" ar "Baba Ali" .. to sei Alibaba Shib-er metaphor noy to! Jibh bar karaa Ma-Kali'r case bole setai swabhabik mone hochhe, tai na? Indro k to pawa jachhe na, tumi ektu light dao na!

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  50. anupam MukhopadhyayTuesday, September 28, 2010

    Ho Ho Ho .......

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  51. Indrani-r "firiye nilaam sab ichhaamoti raat" asaadhaaron. mone holo kono yak bonyaar bhor-e, chaarpaashe jal baaRchhe. bhay-e ghum bhengechhe aamaar. aar keu aamaay aaswasto kore thaamiye dilo jal. bollo "ghuriye dilaam sab ichhaamoti raat"

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  52. priyo Anupam,

    comment to korte bolle.. kintu ele, je bishayTaa niye yakhan kathaa hochchhe, taate je participate korte hay. jehetu lekhaaTaa aamaar, aami bolle kobi-r mataamat habe. e khalaay seTaa maanaabe naa. taai chaaichhilaam naa. baroNg aalochonaagulo poRte majaa laagchhilo.

    ei kobitaaTaa lekhaker naam naa jaaniye aami chaarjon-ke shuniye chhilaam. phone-e. kobider modhye jaaraa net kare naa tyamon chaarjan. taader reaction dekhe to aami abaak. bhaablaam share kori.

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  53. sabgulo-i shune shune likhechhi aami. kichhu yakhano baaki aachhe. segulo ekTu baade korbo. eTaa holo prothom jon-er reaction.


    পাঠক ১ : কার লেখা গো? গোটা কবিতাটাই বোধহয় নিজের বাচ্চাকে নিয়ে। “বিস্কুটের বাউন্ডুলেপনা” হয় না। “বিস্কুট” তাই metonymy। এখানে বাচ্চার সাথে তার association। বাচ্চাটির বাউন্ডুলেপনা। পরপরই দ্যাখো, “ভীষণ মিষ্টি” – বাচ্চাটির বিশেষণ। “সারাদিন গুঁড়ো ঝরতে থাকা” – সারাদিনের দৌড়াত্ম, হৈ চৈ, কচকচি। শরতে অনেকদিনের বর্ষা পেরিয়ে প্রকৃতি পরিপক্ক হয়ে ওঠে রোদে, আলোয়। এ বাচ্চা এখনো পরিপক্ক হ’য়ে ওঠেনি। তাই “শরত হয়নি সবটুকু”।
    শুরুর লাইনে ব্যবহৃত “কবিতা” শব্দটি কবির ঘর গেরস্থালীর প্রতীক আর “বঙ্গীয়” বোধহয় সতেজতার (গোটা কবিতার নদীমাতৃক, বাদল, শরত বাঙলার সে দিকটিকেই নির্দেশ করে)।

    “নদীমাতৃক বলতে বলতে …” – স্বাভাবিক ব্যাপার, অতটুকু বাচ্চার “নদীমাতৃক” বলতে পারার কথাও না। সে নদীমা এর পর আর বলতে পারে না। তাই “মা-এ পড়ে যায় জিভ”।
    কিন্তু দুরন্ত এই শিশু নাছোড়। সেও উচ্চারণ ক’রে ছাড়বে। তাই জিভের পিছনে প’ড়ে যায় “আলিবাবার ছেলে” অর্থাৎ কি না ডাকাতে ছেলে বা দস্যি ছেলে। তা দেখে ঘরশুদ্ধু লোক হাসে। ছেলেটির কান্না ফুঁপিয়ে আসে।
    লেখাটা বোধহয় আগেকার কারো। কারণ আজকের দিনে প্রতীক ফ্রতীক দিয়ে এরকম গল্পমার্কা লেখা অচল।

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  54. পাঠক ২ : কবিতা লেখার পদ্ধতি নিয়ে লেখা কবিতা। মনে আছে ইন্দ্রদা, কবিতা না বুঝতে পারলে ছোটবেলায় বলতাম “এটা বাঙলায় লেখা না”। কবি এখানে ঠিক এর উল্টোটা করেছেন। কবিতার বোধ্য অংশটাকে বলেছেন “বঙ্গীয়”। সেটা কোন অংশ, যেখানে রিলিফ ব্যবহার করা হয়। যেখানে হাততালি পড়ে। চোখে জল আসে। রিলিফ বা অবসর। তাই এসেছে “বিস্কুটের বাউন্ডুলেপনা” অবসর বোঝাতে। যেন এইসব রিলিফে লেখকেরা ইচ্ছে করেই মুচমুচে বিস্কুট (বা মুচমুচে অনুভূতি) বিতরণ করেন পাঠককে। এসব অংশগুলোই কবিতায় আমাদের সবচেয়ে মিষ্টি ব’লে মনে হয়। মনে হয় সারাদিন যেন আমাদের সঙ্গে সঙ্গে রেণু ছড়িয়ে চলেছে। তাই “সারাদিন গুঁড়ো ঝরতে থাকা”। প্রাক শরতের এলোমেলো (কখনো রোদ, কখন মেঘ) অবস্থা মনে।
    “নদীমাতৃক” এসছে “বঙ্গীয়”-র রেফারেন্সে। এখানে কবি ব্যঙ্গ করেছেন, কবিতা বুঝতে চাওয়ার (বা বোধ্য কবিতারও হতে পারে) জোলো জোলো ব্যাপারটাকে। জোলো প্রসঙ্গে এসেছে “নদী”। ব্যঙ্গটি আরো তীব্র করতে এনেছেন “মা এ প’ড়ে যায় জিভ”। মা এখানে আদর আরাম নিরাপত্তার প্রতীক। রিলিফের ওই বোধগম্য মিষ্টি ব্যাপারটি নিয়ে আদিখ্যেতা করা প্রসঙ্গেই স্বাভাবিকভাবে এসে গেছে জিভ দিয়ে মাকে চাটার প্রসঙ্গ।
    এরপরের লাইনে “জিভে প’ড়ে যায় ছেলে” হ’লে সহজবোধ্য হতো। তবে এতক্ষণ বোধ্য কবিতার বিপরীতে ব’লে এখন তিনি আর তা করতে চাইলেন না। তাই রেফারেন্স ছাড়াই “আলিবাবা” এনে গুলিয়ে দিলেন ব্যাপারটাকে। একই গতিতে শেষ করলেন বাকি দুটো লাইন। আগের সঙ্গে কোনো যোগাযোগই রাখলেন না দূর্বোধ করতে।
    মজার লেখা। কবি বেশ রসিক মনে হয়। তবে ইচ্ছাকৃত দূর্বোধ্যতা আমার ভালো লাগে না।

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  55. aaj aapaatoto yato obdi-i. Avro-te type korte somay laagchhe. Avro aamaar saRogaRo nay. baaki duTo hayto pare konodin, somay pele. biskut pele.

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  56. kintu Indra ...

    biscuit jodi misti naa hoe nonTaa hoe ? aamader ekhaane bakery-te jhaal biscuit-o paaoaa jaae ... :)

    jemon biscuit aami nonTaa pochondo kori ... naahole chaa-er songe nei naa ... jome naa ... sob biscuit theke gNuro-o jhawre ki ? jhorleo olpo ...

    aamar kachhe j kono vaalo kobitaai kobita-bisoyok kobitaa . amar mone hoe tomaar kobitaati aaro dher bistrito , tumi jaa vaabchho taar cheye . kobi-r psychology analysis korte gele se songkuchito hoe porbe .

    jemon tumi 'nodimaatrik' shobdo-taake ekta negative apprach dite cheyechho , maane tumi vabchho tumi diechho , aami seta somorthon korchhi naa . kobitaa bujhte chaaoar saapekkhe 'nodimaatrik' ... 'bongio' ... aami maante paarchhi naa . jolo kobita nodi noe , nordoma-k mone porie dae . 'nodimaatrik' maanuser itihaaser songe abichheddo . taake kobita bojhaar prekkhite jog korle setaa sodorthok hoe jaabe , maane paathoker adhikaar jonmaabe kobita bujhte chaaoar , etaa prae taar biological jonmogoto adhikaar hoe jaabe .

    r ... 'baaundulepawna' shobdotaao 'obosor'-er songe jukto hote paare naa . obosor aase alossyo baa upovog baa binodon-er saapekkhe . baaundulepawnaa to jibonchawrchaa-r byapaar ... obosor thaak naa thaak , j baaundule se baaundulepawnaa korbei , parliament-er moddhe dhukeo korbe .

    taai ... biscuit-er mistota baaundulepawnaa noe . baaundulepawna misti byaapar hobe seta compulsory noe hoeto .

    aamar mone hoe naa tomaar kobitaar kono ontornihito ortho aachhe , baa thakar proyojon aachhe . setaa khNujte gele ei kobitatar aasol khela nosto hoe jaabe bhaai .

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  57. ha ha ha ha.. aar prothom paaThok-er reaction? taar ki holo?

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  58. Metonymy (pronounced /mɨˈtɒnɨmi/) is a figure of speech used in rhetoric in which a thing or concept is not called by its own name, but by the name of something intimately associated with that thing or concept. For instance, "Washington", as the capital of the United States, can be used as a metonym (an instance of metonymy) for the United States government.

    ei byapaar nie porte hoechhilo English (Hons) poraar somoy . pore college-e poraanor somoy . aabar mone korie dilo Indra .

    tobe 'biscuit' jototaa chhotoder , tototaai boroder , taar cheyeo besi kore kukurer . ei kobita taahole aadorer pet dog nie lekhaa vaabte problem kothae :) ? jibh ... kukurer jhore porte thaaka laala ... taar gongaani ...

    tobe ei byakhyaao maana jaachhe naa . ei kobita jodi ekti bachcha-r boro hoe otha niei hoe , taahole 1st line-ta justified hochhe naa . aalada kore 'bongio' keno ... prithibir j kono desh-ei ektaa bachcha-r boro hoe othaar process basically eki .

    tobe 1st line urie dile kobitatar prothom byakhya mene neoaa jaae . maante ... aabar bolchhi ... vaalo laage naa .

    Indra-r kobita byakhya-r baaire thaakai vaalo . jemon bNaasir sur ... taate katha ki bosaatei hobe ?

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  59. Anupam,
    Asole kobita nibhrito pather jinis. Tai ami abritikarder bipokkhe kathaa boli, jara school-e college-e byakkhya karaa shekhay tader birudhhe boli. Amra sobai mile Indro'r kobitake arong dholai diyeo bindumatro barno gandho swad komate parini, ta chai-o ni, kintu pray posiible mone hochhilo. Asole alochanata majaar modhyei shes hole bhalo hoy. Ekhanei danri tana jak.

    Indro, 1ta kobita bibhinno pathaker kache bhinno holei bhalo. Sabai ek bodh-e pouchole setake kobir solid kobita ba sambhabona rohito kobita bolte habe. Tomar ei kobitati ekhano liquid stage-e ache, unless you dont put it into a freezer, or, glass niye bose paro. Tahole amake deko abar.

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  60. right said Barinda . tobe byapaarta darun jome gechhilo . ashaa koraa jaae porer post-e-o Indra-r kobita nie emni torko koraa jaabe .

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  61. Anupam,
    Er par Indro k rehai diye anyo kono pantha khonjo. Ador karaa jak bolir age. Lekhak nije jodi mojata feel na kare tahole bipad. Seta bhebe chinte koro. Avisek kobita dey na keno?

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  62. tumi paaNThaa baanaachchhi bole dile aar ke sei satkaarje raaji habe, Barinda? :)

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  63. loke ektu nodhor ektu kochi pathai khoNje, tai amder moto roga chakchikkohin kauke patha banate chay na............:)ho ho ho

    [ami boli hote raji achi]

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  64. Manik,
    Ke boleche Paanthaader bhobisyat nei, intelligence nei? Tara boli hote hote Hibiskasi acharone shorirer baire beriye ese je taariye taariye dekhte thake rosayaner swader gandher tumul lalosa ar shohidi swarthakota ar Ishwarer kache prarthona kare punarjanmo .. seta ki balleni keu? Ei jemon Indro ki nipun bhabe ros grahon korlo, tate ki or kono upokar holo na? Manik, tumi ki Indro ke dekhecho? Tar shunyo shorir, shunyo shorir, athacho dekho, se haasche.

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  65. Anupam,

    Agla baar Manik sacrifice hote raji hoyeche. Come on. Na ki tumi matha gunjbe !

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  66. asabharan lekha sab r alochana aro valo ,barinda fire asate r o pran pelo lekhar jagat ta

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  67. prio anupam
    indra ekhon sharate aachhanna.kabitar sange sharater
    byabosaik smparka karo karo thakte pare,indrar aache
    basar samparka.bhalobasa.o natun basa nieche.sei basay
    aaro kabitar intubintu hok.baak jamche besh.kabita nie
    se bhabe balar cheye ami sharat ebong sishir nie ektu
    ushke di.indra,tapon,manik,subhankar,abhishek,ebong aar jara aache tara ei shrate sishirer anakraman chuktike patta debi ki?
    .pa fellei,bhore,shrat o sishir.shabda r dhawnitakhan pray aapta sahayak.
    pakhi aar manush ghum bhangar muhurte asahay thake ektu.pakhiderta anuman,manusher?se pa rakhe,alo ek nivrita bhairon nie apekhhaay.ebar chokh asbe.
    apekhhaaNka,ashankatur,abinduari chokhera.bhabo sabai.
    ba nijer moto kono bhabnasutrake baak-e dao.kabita
    nie aalochonar cheye jaruri mone hoy kabitar aage
    je sab muhurta amader pare pawa se sab nie interact kara.kabita pare mamuli bhalo na kharap lagata janano
    kabir kaaj noi.barinda eta jane. marmarita alochonay chole jai.eta sabaipare na.kabita bojhar
    jinish noi.baak-e ei asadharan abujhtike nie eso
    ektu byasto hawa jaak.
    swapan roy

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  68. natun post hoe gelo . cholo ... cholun sokole http://2000banglapoets.blogspot.com/2010/09/44th-post_30.html

    ekta golmaal hoechhe . aami vul kore natun post prothome 44th post likhe felaae html ektu ultopalta esechhe . se jaak .

    katha bolte jaai taahole ...

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